Review of Fairy Tale

 

To all at Aurich, minders of the Fairy Tale Rolling Story

I must say it was a very interesting story that resulted from the combination of all the different paragraphs put together. Some people have some wild imaginations that matched with the imaginations of all the other schools so well. I didn't know what was going to happen next, with the amount of bright lights and it was amusing being on this strange world that we had all created.

The most enjoyable part was about the candy-coated house - it is like something you would dream about often. I found the story very different and I enjoyed reading it very much! Congratulations to all involved in the creation of this story.

Thank you
Fiona Flynn ( Our Lady's Grammar School, Newry)

Although the story was slightly dragged out it contained most of the elements associated with all the great fairy tales. I know that a Fairy Tale isn't one of the easiest stories to write. The opening paragraph must have been impossible to adapt into a fairy tale situation but Aurich did an excellent job.

First there's the magician, then the dogs playing golf, then the goblin together with many other mythical creatures. These all add to the fairy tale atmosphere. The Alice in Wonderland theme crosses with Hansel and Gretel in paragraph three but quickly returns with more unpredictable twists.

Both foreign schools used perfect English and Risskov greatly helped thicken the plot in the second last paragraph before Aurich finished it off with an incredibly unsuspected ending which was the icing on the cake in relation to this brilliant story.

Sinead Clarke Mount Saint Michaels

... story was well written with a good choice of vocabulary and imagery. It oozed imagination ... all in all we enjoyed the unpredictable theme of this fairy tale which had a very surprising ending.

By Sarah Hession & Selina Gartland. MSM

... I thought the graphics were very good also and the end of the story came together very nicely. It was very imaginative and we enjoyed reading it .

BY Eileen Conroy & Deirdre Cunningham MSM

This is a very good story. It was a very hard theme to write about. The plot was very well thought out. We were wondering how Aurich would end the story and they made a very good job of it. Also, the graphics were outstanding. It was a very good idea to have the story translated into English as not everyone understands German.

By: Aoife Coughlan & Marian Griffin. MSM

This is a very interesting story. It has been well researched and meets all the criteria of a Fairy tale genre. There are lots of changes throughout the story. Even though Fairy tales are meant for children we think that this story would prove difficult for many of them to follow.

It adapted different themes from other children's stories. This added more interest to the tale. It became more easily understood towards the end.

We enjoyed this story as any loose ends were cleverly tied up at the end. The graphics were very well chosen to fit in with the story.

by Ann Concannon; Angela Corley: Aisling Devane. MSM

The setting by Terenure is excellent. He uses a wide range of vocabulary and a lot of descriptive writing to describe "the setting" and start of the story. He also ends the paragraph in such a way that lets all genres continue the paragraph with little or no difficulty.

The first paragraph by Aurich in my opinion is reasonable. The paragraph starts off OK, but then it ends suddenly saying that the car "lifted" off and she only saw many colours. This is a little too vague and a bit more explanation with some descriptive writing would be welcome here. Of course, this is a translation from their native language into English.

The second paragraph by Newry carries on well from the previous paragraph. They describe Sue transmogrified as a light came closer to her. I also like the way in which they describe the world around her.

The third paragraph by MSM is of a very high standard in my opinion. There is a good constant flow of words and also good descriptive writing is used to describe the pink house. I also like the twist in the tail when the house disappears and she finds herself before a giant green maze.

The fourth paragraph by Terenure is of average content and contains nothing special. After saying that, I must admit that it does help carry the story along and also tells us more about the "light."

The fifth paragraph by Risskov is excellent in my opinion because of the imagination used in this paragraph. They help move the story on a lot and make us wonder what the last test might be!

The final paragraph by Aurich is a little disappointing and a little unoriginal. The story was excellent up to then and I feel that this final paragraph would send readers everywhere off feeling disappointed. However the whole production by Aurich is very good and they deserve great praise. I also wish that I could read it in the original German but mine is not good enough.

By Tony Smith. Terenure

At the first glance at the setting by bryn tormey, terenure college, i thought that if the other paragraphs fell into place this rolling story could be good. The first paragraph by the aurich school was very good and gripping because you did'nt know what was going to happen to susanne. The second pragraph fell into the setting and the first pargraph nicely, describing her surroundings as she entered the fairytail world.it went smoothly from there on untill the start of the fifth paragraph, i did'nt think it made sense but at the end of that paragraph it started to fall into place, susanne was being tested on three thingsjoy, care and compassion. The finish of the story was very good by using a story from the bible to determine who the mother of george was.

Overall i thought the story was good and im sure it would be enjoyed more by kids.

By Gerard McAndrew

Review of Susanne in Wunderland

The introduction by Brian Tormey was a great and had good detail and imagery.
Then story is carried on in the 2nd paragraph by Nadine Memenga, who made the story a bit unrealistic when a young lonesome girl takes a lift from a man who uninvited entered the her car. The transition between reality and the magical world was not very well explained in my opinion. I felt the descriptive writing in the 3rd paragraph by the M.S.M. girl's was excellent. I feel the 4th paragraph by the Terenure lads did the best to carry the story forward. Finally the conclusion was interesting and was a good ending to the story as it tied up all the lose ends.

ConorWhelan

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