Rolling Story Review (by Mount Saint Michael) 'Whodunnit' The story itself had great balance and was extremely well written. The reader was immersed in a mind-boggling mystery which intrigued and aroused interest.
The babysitter is found dead in the hallway. The leading lady, Karen wonders who it could be. There are three suspects in this particular situation, the husband, the "nutter" next door, and the couple's child, Orla.
In the third paragraph, there is a moment of great suspense with the telephone call, where a foreign character declares that he knows the identification of the killer. Here, the reader is almost "sucked" into the story, where she feels it is an absolute necessity to identify the killer.
We, as a group, thought the beginning of the story had potential, however, as it got further into the plot, it seemed to lose the magical effect it possessed initially.
But the plot thickened dramatically as the babysitter's boyfriend made his entrance. He took responsibility for making the phone call which was the key to solving the mystery. Karen, the leading lady, was shocked to observe blood on his hands. Karen proceeded to make a phone call to the police, but this line of enquiry led her in the wrong direction.
The ending was extremely dramatic. It brought the piece to an appropriate ending. There was a very high standard of English which definitely added to the quality of the story.
By: Mary Hennelly, Sarah Hession and Hazel Heneghan.
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Hello Terenure,
Orla, Caithriona and Sinead here from Mount Saint Michael. We've just read your "Whodunit?" rolling story and it did in fact keep us on the edge of our seats!!
It was a perfect example of a Whodunit story. It was full of surprise and suspense and it was very dramatic. All options were kept open the whole way through so it was impossible to decide who the murderer really was. The plot really thickened in paragraph 5, by Our Lady's Grammar, when Colm the babysitter's boyfriend turned up covered in blood!
It also must have been really hard to decide what to write in the last paragraph but you did an excellent job. The story was very well written, it was brilliant!! Thanks for such an entertaining read!
- By Orla Casby, Caithriona Clancy and Sinead Clarke.
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The ending to the who dunnit story took us completely by surprise. The story was very well written with great use of direct speech to add to the tension. We feel as if we are in the story and are worried for the safety of the characters. There is great variety in the sentences as well as clever use of adjectives which all add to the first class ending. I liked the style of speech used by Richard . It showed how psychotic he really was and also added an element of comedy to the paragraph. The clues were all expertly linked up to provide a cohesive piece, adhering to the rules of its genre. The first paragraph was included in the conclusion tying up any remaining unanswered questions.
Our only criticism, was the introduction of unnecessary characters which seemed only to serve the purpose of confusing us. However this criticism pales in comparison to the superb command of the story. Overall we found the story enthralling and extremely entertaining. It is an ending to be proud of.
by Kelly Geraghty, Michelle Cunningham, Lorraine Forde, Marian Griffin.
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I think that the story has a very surprising end which Terenure make a very good job of doing. The ending was very unpredictable. It kept us at the edge of our seats wondering who the killer was. We would never have guessed that her brother would have been the killer. Also, who would guess that her ex-husband would save the day?
We love the descriptive use of words which helped us to picture the scene more easily. We also appreciated the conversational style that was used in the last paragraph.
The ending of the story was very good. Well done everyone!
BY: Aoife Coughlan, Eileen Conroy & Deirdre Cunningham.
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It's a story of suspense and surprise . The story is very well written. We found that the story was well balanced and brought out the feelings and emotions of its characters very well.
You become totally engrossed in the story. It is very unpredictable just as a 'Whodunit' story should be. There are just enough characters to keep the story interesting . If there was any more it would be drawn out and would become boring very quickly but that didn't happen in this story.
Right up to the end you are gripped by its story line. It is a well researched and written story by all. It was probably one of the more difficult stories to piece together at the end but this too was very well done.
By: Aisling Devane, Ann Concannon and Angela Corley.
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When we first read the first paragraph of this story we thought it was going to be a really boring storyline. As the different schools were adding more and more to it it became a lot more interesting. Everyone loves mystery storylines and this one was really nail-biting. At first we were completely in the dark as to who the murderer was.
Each paragraph was developed always bearing in mind the first paragraph. It was in easy readable English text. The storyline kept us in complete suspense as to the ultimate identity of the murderer. The characters were well described in each paragraph. But in the end it all came together when the murder was uncovered and we were all shocked to discover who the murderer was.
By Lisa Burke and Tracey Browne.
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